In _F of F--A_ after the words, "my tale must," she develops an elaborate figure: "go with the stream that hurries on--& now was this stream precipitated by an overwhelming fall from the pleasant vallies through which it wandered--down hideous precipieces to a desart black & hopeless--".
This, the original ending of the chapter, was scored out, and a new, simplified version which, with some deletions and changes, became that used in _Mathilda_ was written in the margins of two pages (ff.

57, 58).

This revision is a good example of Mary's frequent improvement of her style by the omission of purple patches.
[23] In _F of F--A_ there follows a passage which has been scored out and which does not appear in _Mathilda_: "I have tried in somewhat feeble language to describe the excess of what I may almost call my adoration for my father--you may then in some faint manner imagine my despair when I found that he shunned [me] & that all the little arts I used to re-awaken his lost love made him"-- .

This is a good example of Mary's frequent revision for the better by the omission of the obvious and expository.

But the passage also has intrinsic interest.
Mathilda's "adoration" for her father may be compared to Mary's feeling for Godwin.